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afsangel Special Member
Number of posts : 6693 Roleplay Name : Kazumi Martin
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| Subject: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:00 pm | |
| Preface I was 16 at the time, and betrothed to a man named Edger Heartman. My family was a middle-class one, and Edger's was a first class. "His father a governer." my mother had gushed. "he is so handsom, you'll love Edger!" "well, i must admit, Edger was very good-looking, but-there was just something about him that didn't attract me." "perhaps it was his pride, or the way he veiwed people less forchunte." "Either way, i didn't like him." "And i didn't want to be a first-class lady either." "I would rather be begging for money on the streets then be consumed by wealth and greed." "but, as a girl in my scocity at the time, i didn't have much of that deciction." "Orginally, the plan was for Edger and I to be married here, in great britain. "but those plans changed a few weeks ago, when a boat that clamied to be "unsinkable" made its way into the paper." "It was then that my future in-laws and my parents decided for us to go to America to get married, and raise a family there." "To be Honest, i didn't think much of it except 'i'm going to be married to the king of idiots in a supposed 'free land'." "Little did i know, the adventure-and romance-that waited for me on the boat known as 'The Morning Star'." Chapter One: I hate my name! "Sophia Grace Lethner!" my mother shouted for me in the supermarket. I instandly felt my ears grow hot. "Mom!" I snapped. I hated my name. It was so stupid. Sophia Grace? It sounded to eligante. To lady-like. And that wasn't who I was at all. "oh, there you are." my mother said gracfully twirling toward me. "you scared me." "come now, we must prepare for the wedding." "it's in a month you know, and it's never to early to start~" i rolled my eyes as my mother babbled on. my mother was a social-climber. So uppity and talkitive. Now don't get me wrong, i love my mother, she's just to-girly for my taste. I had always been diffrent from other british dames. While walking with books on their head, i would be playing in the mud. While waring fancy dressing and drinking expensive tea, i would be waring play clothes and drink water only when i got thirsty. The Debutaunt life wasn't for me. and, it never would be. (finishe dis later, please tell me how it is~ don't hold back!)
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gothica800 Banned
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:05 pm | |
| "You stole this from the movie didn't you?" | |
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afsangel Special Member
Number of posts : 6693 Roleplay Name : Kazumi Martin
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:06 pm | |
| it's based off the movie. i didn't steal anything. although i've never seen the movie, i kno what it's about and i read about it online. it's similer to it. | |
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gothica800 Banned
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:08 pm | |
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afsangel Special Member
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:10 pm | |
| so, how is it so far? :3 i've deicided, i want to be a really good writer, so i will take critism and suggestions! >:3 | |
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gothica800 Banned
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:11 pm | |
| "Good and i can't wait for the romance, but is he gonna die like the guy did on titanic?" | |
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afsangel Special Member
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:14 pm | |
| hmm dunno, it would make sence but it's kinda obveous. | |
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gothica800 Banned
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:20 pm | |
| "C'mon make a LASTING love." | |
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afsangel Special Member
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:23 pm | |
| maybe i'll make a twisted ending full of violence and ecplations and DEATH! > | |
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Kritten Admin
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:23 pm | |
| You might want to change the name of the boat. It could be considered plagirism or otherwise it's illeagel. It has a nice concept to it, but it is too close to the novel The Titanic (Yes, the movie is based of the book.) | |
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gothica800 Banned
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:25 pm | |
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afsangel Special Member
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:26 pm | |
| i changed the name of the boat. maybe i should delete it and lable it "void" cu i got nothin' | |
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gothica800 Banned
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:27 pm | |
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afsangel Special Member
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:29 pm | |
| still, i don't want to copywrite anything | |
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gothica800 Banned
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:32 pm | |
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afsangel Special Member
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:35 pm | |
| so...should i change the plot? i still want it to be about a girl getting on a baot and the boat sinking due to some sort of problem. | |
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gothica800 Banned
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:38 pm | |
| "No the plots perfect keep it like it is." | |
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afsangel Special Member
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:40 pm | |
| r u sure it's not copywrite? *worried* | |
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gothica800 Banned
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:40 pm | |
| "I'm positive it's not." n.n | |
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afsangel Special Member
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:42 pm | |
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Kritten Admin
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Thu Feb 19, 2009 10:54 pm | |
| Yep. It's not copywritten. | |
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Red Riding Hood Sprite
Number of posts : 2119 Roleplay Name : Blue
| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Fri Feb 20, 2009 11:30 am | |
| Kwooooooar~! Reluctant marriage! I'm so gonna eat this up every time you update it.
You've got a nice plot going here! Not many people write about things like that~
Can I give you some advice? There is one book you might like to read~ It's called 'Dragonmede'. I seriously reccomend it for you, it has all this stuff towards the middle about reluctant marriage and evil husbands and death and stuff.
You've thrilled me. That's worse than killing. | |
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afsangel Special Member
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Fri Feb 20, 2009 11:58 am | |
| oh dear 0.0 ya, unlike my other unfinished stories, i'll try to finish dis one ^^' kitty's my editoir! | |
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Red Riding Hood Sprite
Number of posts : 2119 Roleplay Name : Blue
| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Fri Feb 20, 2009 10:03 pm | |
| LOOOOOVE the update~ Gurrrrrglelygloo... KEEP GOING. | |
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afsangel Special Member
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| Subject: Re: Morning Star-a Love story Fri Feb 20, 2009 10:07 pm | |
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