The Sun, The Moon, and the Midnight Skye

The sun. The sun has always been the center of attention. With her long flowing golden hair and bubbly blue eyes. Everyone loves the sun. All the boys crush on her. I've seen their faces turn red when they've been in her presence to long. i see them flirt and talk with her. Her warm personailty causes her to gleam brightly apon all of them.

Then, there's me. the moon. I hide in the sun's shadow. I evny her from afar. I give off a very dim glow. and when someone dare look at me, i hide behind the clouds. No one every sees me. my long dark hair hangs loosly over me face. her soft purple eyes are always filled with sorrow. No one ever ntoices the moon. No matter how hard i try, i cannot bring meself to hate the sun. For she is too innocent. And i am bitter and cold. Bringing nothign but darkness, when she brings nothign but light.

But there is one, who always comes to see me. The midnight Skye. He embraces me when i want to cry, and meets me every evening on the bridge when the sun goes to sleep. He says he loves me, and wants be with me forever. And i love him, too. I go to him with my problems and he always listens. I may not be thre prettyist brightest person around; but if there's one thing that keeps me alive; it's the midnight skye, and the willpower, to prove meself worthy.

i actually came up with an idea like this a while ago. but never wrote it. it kinda sucks, but the whole idea is to decibe the su and moon to HD characters. and you an probably guess who.

>__<!!!!!! KAZU!!! THAT WAS SOOOOOO GOOOOOOOOD!!!!!!!! D8 Dang!!! *envies your brain* D: That was like.... ubertastic pro! >_<

really? i was half out of it when typing it. kinda made it up as i went. some lines i remebered though. i made them when when i first came up with the idea. i don't think it's that good

"it's AWESOME!"

It's good!!I like it!

that's good..

I-I-I I'm out of breathe.....that was .....AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!..........i should learn a little from you

this is nicee:) great job

thanks. but really, i was half brain-dead while writing this. one of those things where it sounds so good in your head, amazingly good, then you go to write it down and the words are all gubmled up.

Happens to me all the time. I usually start stories by getting one line in my head, or one idea, and building off of that. But then, I just stop short, because I reached a dead end. And I either have to go back and try again, or I have to start from scratch. T_T

yea, i just normally come up with an idea and build off of it. then people go 'omg! that's sooo good!" and i'll just be like 'ya......sure...." exept for my editor kitty, who sees all meh mistakes XD

I'm a beta reader on Fanfiction.net ((currently reading something for someone called waterfall42; she's a good writer)), and I have to be able to see flaws along with the good things. It makes my writing a little smoother, just to see mistakes that other people are making, and take my own advice.

Is it over? Or are you gonna keep going? It's really really really good. The most poetic thing I can think of is a big pile of explosive mud compared to yours. By the way, I could really use your help. You see, I have a story called Carly's Nightmare... Or Was It?, and I really need help with the next part. If you have time to read it, just post on there, or PM me. Thanks so much. Once again: Is it over?!?!?!?!?!?!?

ya ^^' it was a one-shot thing..but i'll read yoru story♥

i wish i had writing skills like urs kazu..

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ya ^^' it was a one-shot thing..but i'll read your story♥

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i read also urs..it was good too..^^