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Eternal Silence Admin
Number of posts : 6205 Roleplay Name : Arden Auiban Awards :
| Subject: __Betrayal__ Wed Mar 25, 2009 8:42 pm | |
| ((YAY! Just another one of Eternal's sucky made-in-a-minute poems. XD Enjoy anyways; just keep in mind that this is a really, really bad poem and I'm not actually that serious about/proud of it. ^^))
The truth is written beyond your eyes It’s time I stopped the madness, the lies Why am I never enough for you? Why am I able to see right through?
Your charades are aged and tiring Leave me here, inquiring As to why that diminutive voice Encouraged you to make the wrong choice
Cheater, cheater, liar, liar The only thing I feel is ire You broke my heart; but I’m to blame My heart was open for you to claim
I regret it now; I know it’s true Relief is all I get from you Am I a burden? A ball and chain? Where there was sunshine, now there is rain
No matter. I’m a big girl now I’ll be more wary with what I allow I’ll pick up the pieces of my heart Now that you’re gone, I’ll make a new start | |
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gothica800 Banned
Number of posts : 4632
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Wed Mar 25, 2009 8:47 pm | |
| "i think it's awesome you might be able to be a poet!" | |
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Eternal Silence Admin
Number of posts : 6205 Roleplay Name : Arden Auiban Awards :
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Wed Mar 25, 2009 8:50 pm | |
| Despite the numerous poems I post here, I'm actually not that interested in poetry. I don't like to actually sit down and write stories sometimes, though, so my poems are creative vents so my head doesn't explode. XD
But thanks for the compliment! It gives me the warm fuzzies! *hugs self* | |
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gothica800 Banned
Number of posts : 4632
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Wed Mar 25, 2009 8:51 pm | |
| "no problem, what're friends for?" | |
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Kritten Admin
Number of posts : 8780 Roleplay Name : Kitty Kitz Awards :
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Wed Mar 25, 2009 9:01 pm | |
| I like your word choice. It makes me feel happy on the inside. The fact that you think your poems are not good is a conundrum to me. | |
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Eternal Silence Admin
Number of posts : 6205 Roleplay Name : Arden Auiban Awards :
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Wed Mar 25, 2009 9:05 pm | |
| I am a vocabulary nerrrrrd. But I usually only use my big-girl words when I'm really, really angry or upset, or if I'm really into what I'm writing. XD
And...geez, I don't think it's any good. O.o Maybe it has to do with the fact that I went from zero to DONE in about three seconds. XD I don't like to edit poems. So this is a pretty raw version. | |
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Kritten Admin
Number of posts : 8780 Roleplay Name : Kitty Kitz Awards :
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Wed Mar 25, 2009 9:10 pm | |
| Raw poems are the best cause they are fresh. They capture true emotion. | |
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Eternal Silence Admin
Number of posts : 6205 Roleplay Name : Arden Auiban Awards :
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Wed Mar 25, 2009 9:10 pm | |
| Which is why I don't like to edit them. I don't like that "processed" kinda sense that comes with combing over my stuff. | |
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gothica800 Banned
Number of posts : 4632
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Wed Mar 25, 2009 9:39 pm | |
| "i'm not to good at proofing either." XD | |
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Eternal Silence Admin
Number of posts : 6205 Roleplay Name : Arden Auiban Awards :
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Wed Mar 25, 2009 10:35 pm | |
| Well, I'm pretty good at proofing, I just don't like to do it. XD | |
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Kritten Admin
Number of posts : 8780 Roleplay Name : Kitty Kitz Awards :
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Thu Mar 26, 2009 2:33 am | |
| - Eternal Silence wrote:
- Well, I'm pretty good at proofing, I just don't like to do it. XD
I like proofing other peoples writings, in which I can be cruel. | |
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moonlighto3 Farmer
Number of posts : 800 Roleplay Name : Mist Evergreen
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Thu Mar 26, 2009 3:37 pm | |
| you're really my idol!! I like your poems and stories! I think i'll never be good like you.. btw, more power and goodluck! | |
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Kritten Admin
Number of posts : 8780 Roleplay Name : Kitty Kitz Awards :
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Thu Mar 26, 2009 5:17 pm | |
| - moonlighto3 wrote:
- you're really my idol!!
I like your poems and stories! I think i'll never be good like you.. btw, more power and goodluck! Don't give up! ES just has had more practice than you, it doesn't mean you'll never be as good as her. | |
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Eternal Silence Admin
Number of posts : 6205 Roleplay Name : Arden Auiban Awards :
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Thu Mar 26, 2009 10:21 pm | |
| - moonlighto3 wrote:
- you're really my idol!!
I like your poems and stories! I think i'll never be good like you.. btw, more power and goodluck! D'awww~ I don't think anyone's ever called me their idol before! That's so sweet! Thanks! And I'm sure you're just fine. Like Kitty said, I do have a lot of practice. I've been writing since practically before I could talk, and I've taken workshops and stuff to improve. Just keep writing, and don't be afraid to ask for help, and don't be afraid of critique. If you ever want a second opinion on your stories, you can always PM me! ^^ | |
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moonlighto3 Farmer
Number of posts : 800 Roleplay Name : Mist Evergreen
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Fri Mar 27, 2009 12:05 pm | |
| - 12kittycat1214 wrote:
- moonlighto3 wrote:
- you're really my idol!!
I like your poems and stories! I think i'll never be good like you.. btw, more power and goodluck! Don't give up! ES just has had more practice than you, it doesn't mean you'll never be as good as her. thanks! i promise i'll practice more! | |
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moonlighto3 Farmer
Number of posts : 800 Roleplay Name : Mist Evergreen
| Subject: Re: __Betrayal__ Fri Mar 27, 2009 12:07 pm | |
| - Eternal Silence wrote:
- moonlighto3 wrote:
- you're really my idol!!
I like your poems and stories! I think i'll never be good like you.. btw, more power and goodluck! D'awww~ I don't think anyone's ever called me their idol before! That's so sweet! Thanks!
And I'm sure you're just fine. Like Kitty said, I do have a lot of practice. I've been writing since practically before I could talk, and I've taken workshops and stuff to improve. Just keep writing, and don't be afraid to ask for help, and don't be afraid of critique. If you ever want a second opinion on your stories, you can always PM me! ^^ Thanks! I promise i'll practice more to be like my idol! ok! bye! | |
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